文都国际教育：备考雅思写作 你会修改文章吗

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　　雅思写作光会写可不行，我们还要学会怎么改，虽然很多人可以一次成文，但是学会修改是个好习惯，这一点光从雅思范文中你是看不出来的，下面文都国际教育小编就为备考雅思写作考试的同学介绍一下该如何修改文章。

　　雅思写作考试修改文章的方法：

　　举个例子，在我读哈佛法学院那本书的时候，发现即使最牛的金牌律师，在临上庭的时候都会把盘问的每一个字写在纸上，以求万无一失，作为第二语言学习者的我们，在英文学习的时候，没有任何理由不这么去做。雅思班的同学发来一些句子，让我帮他们修改，而我给他们的建议都是自己先修改三次，有明显进步后，有解决不了的问题我再来帮助他们。以下是几个我觉得比较典型的句子，我们来分析一下。

　　原句：With all the reasons, the mind to be with you is always existing from the first moment when opening my eyes to the last second when clasing them, and is planted in my heart deeptly just like a luxuriant tree.

　　点评：With all the reasons, the mind to be with you is always existing(时态有一点问题) from 要加上the first moment when opening(主语是mind不是I,所以这里不能用ing，否则就是mind自己张开眼睛的意思) my eyes to the last second when clasing(单词拼写错误) them, and is planted (是不是想说植根)in my heart deeply, just like a luxuriant tree.

　　修改参考：With all the reasons that can be found in this universe, the faith to be with has been deeply rooted in my mind, heart and soul from the first moment when I open my eyes to the last second when I close them.

　　原句：I will spend my entire life protecting you and to make you be away from the hurt, undoubtedly, ensureyou live in the world filled with sunshine and happiness.

　　修改点评：I will spent my entire life protecting you and to make(这里不能用不定式) you be away from the hurt, undoubtedly(放在动词前面或者句子前面), ansure(单词拼写错误)you live in the world filled with sunshine and happiness.

　　I will spend (加上副词) my entire life protecting you from any hurt(什么样的伤害) and ensure you a world with sunshine and happiness.(后面可以加很多细节)

　　修改参考 It may take you years to wait for me but I spend my entire life searching for you, only hoping to keep you safe from harms in pouring rain and bring in an endless sunshine where all flowers blooms at your smile, all birds sing at your call, all stars twinkle at your dance, and all the universe turns to heaven at your love.

　　原句：When the earthquake occurs, the world gives a warm hand.

　　点评修改：When the earthquake occurs on May 12th, causing nearly 30 thousand people of death and making most cities in ruins, the whole world offers a warm hand, extremely donation(是不是想说generous???) ,kind-hearted assist (是不是想说assistance???) and the strength which we cohere for Sichuan.

　　修改参考：The earthquake on May 12th can shake the foundation of Sichuan’s tallest buildings, leaving 70000 lives killed and several cities destroyed, but it cannot touch the foundation of the whole world where a warm hand is always there, the entire planet where we are always connected as one, and the global village where all is for one and one is for all.